Scientific research fascinates me. Experiments raise many questions and always provide new challenges. Research also supplies knowledge of the most intimate interactions of the natural processes, giving a glimpse of processes that are not easy to understand. With the referral of my academic advisor, I managed to look into the Cold Spring Laboratory’s departmental websites and read some research publications. I was able to get quite a bit of knowledge on cancer genomics, neurodevelopmental disorders and formation of neuronal networks in decision making and memory. My readings inspired me to raise some questions on the concepts and developed my interest to be part of the scientific research team and further explore these concepts.
I discovered my passion for research when I joined the University of Eastern Delaware (UED) Physician Assistant Department. As a student at UED and as a member of the American Association of Physician Assistants, I have gained a strong background in biological, health, physiological, and behavioral sciences. I have concentrated on the physiology of the nervous system and behavioral mechanisms of the brain. My theory-based studies of the anatomy and physiology of the human brain have left me with a great interest in further exploring and understanding the physiological processes of the brain. It is this great interest that motivated me to apply to the Horn Point Undergraduate Research Program.
My short term goal is to successfully complete the Physician Assistant program and earn my bachelors degree. Currently, I am a junior with a GPA of 3. 80. At the end of my sophomore year, I have carried out research at Eastern York Laboratory in Cambridge, MA with Scott Sims, PhD. My research was focused on the application of membrane inlet mass spectrometry to investigate metabolic processes. Moreover, I am an active participant in various voluntary associations and clubs at UED. These include the American Fisher’s Society East Division, Student Health Awareness Association, American Chemical Society, and the International Students Association. These organizations give me an opportunity to network with others in my field and by volunteering with the organizations I am able to put into practice what I have learned in the classroom.
My long-term career goals are be a certified Physician Assistant and continue my education to earn an M. D-Ph. D. , specializing in Neuroscience. As a clinical neuroscientist I will use my research findings to develop diagnostic methods and ways to prevent and treat neurological disorders that affect the brain. I think the knowledge and the hands on experience I will get from the Horn Point Laboratory Undergraduate Research Program will give me a sense of direction in developing and conducting scientific research and apply the knowledge I get from my research. In addition, I believe interacting with other professionals and students who share my passion and enthusiasm for research will help me explore different opportunities for graduate school and help me shape my long-term goal.

Just some punctuation fixes Good Job

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Being involved in these organizations has given me the opportunity to network with others in my field. In addition, by volunteering in these organizations, I have learned to put into practice much of what I have learned in the classroom.
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This is VERY well-written!!!
We need people of your intelligence in the medical field. GOOD LUCK!!